Draft Thesis Statements

Thesis Statements are the backbone of any essay. A good thesis statement explains in a sentence or two what the entire paper is about and what the reader should expect to find in the following paragraphs. Below are three of my thesis's, that I may use to write my analytical essay about.

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• In this article, the author uses logic and credibility to validate his well- accepted opinion about nuclear fusion
• This thesis statement is compact to the point that there are only three points that can be talked about in a major way. These points are his logical approach, credibility, and how these two word to validate his opinion. This provides only three body paragraphs, which is in my opinion, not enough to completely analyze an article in the most constructive way. It would be hard to develop my full analytical essay even though there are a lot of examples of Steven Cowley's logic and credibility 
• The construction of this argument is built around the context of the article, the logical approach the author takes in writing the article, and the author's credibility. 
• This thesis statement is a remarkable improvement over the first one. It provides three major points for me to write body paragraphs about and each of these points have numerous examples in the text for me to draw from.  What's difficult about this particular thesis statement is the lack of freedom in the rhetoric to expand beyond the examples and into my own opinion about the author's use of rhetorical strategies to convey his point.  While this thesis would make a good paper, I fear that using this one would limit me from making a great paper. 
• The purpose of Steven Cowley's article is effective because the use of his reputation, relevant contextual examples and usage of logos to explain his purpose.
• This thesis statement is the best of the bunch because it contains four major points to write about. His four points being: relevant contextual examples, effective usage of logos, his reputation, and how the use of these validate his opinion.  I believe this thesis will make a better analytical essay because it takes the three best parts of Cowley's writing, explains them and then in a final paragraph shows how Cowley uses those points to portray his opinion. This paper will be easy to develop because each of these points have multiple examples in the text.  However, what will be difficult is explaining myself effectively to the reader on how these three major points work together to validate the authors opinion succinctly.

Edit:
I left a comment on Thomas and Chingiz. Both of their thesis statements were fleshed out well but both lacked an opinion about whether or not the purpose of the article was effectively explained through rhetorical strategies. Thomas had a good road map regarding the direction his essay would take. Chingiz also did this really well but his thesis statements were a little more concise which I like a lot. Reading over my thesis statements, I realized that I don't explain the purpose of my article's effectiveness through use of rhetorical strategies. As well, I was broad about what examples I would be using in my paper that I wrote into my thesis. Besides this, my thesis was well developed and both Thomas and Chingiz wrote some well developed thesis as well. Well done!